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Title: Drowning Author: HelpMeBackUp3
This sadness is overwhelming You left me empty Left without another chance Why can't you see? I try to be perfect Be everything you need Give you as much happiness as you gave me But still, I fail to succeed Now I'm left here Trying to contemplate what I did wrong You say it wasn't me But really, it was me all along I don't feel played I don't feel used I don't feel cheated I feel confused I feel like I'm drowning Sinking to the bottom of my mind I can't get out It's so dark, I'm blind. Now I'm sitting here Dwelling in my own head It's not hard to say You're all I can think about while in bed The sadness is taking over It keeps piling on So dive in and save me Before I am gone Comments on "Drowning"
Posted by Zaza on March 16, 2018
This poem is awesome! I love the way you dispose the ideas. Posted by RobinRebirth on September 15, 2017 You have the words so magnetizing my eyes were really set on every word greatly penned Posted by moontigerntn on February 15, 2016 wow! nicely written - rhymes well. Posted by Wrangwar on September 27, 2014 I feel like I really could've related to this, when I was twelve Posted by Coltenevans on June 19, 2014 Great poem. Check out mine. I'm 15 years old and never wrote until a week ago. But I was told I had a gift and I want to share it Posted by OTownPete on April 21, 2014 When given over to confusion situations can make us feel exactly like this. Posted by thedarknesslieswithin on March 22, 2014 Love Posted by Janazar on February 03, 2014 I really like the 'I don't' verse. The rest is very good, but that part will stick with me. Posted by deeja on September 04, 2013 wow... superb.. !! Posted by SongChild21 on August 06, 2013 Great technique, good use of poetic license. Love it from start to finish. It really touched my heart |
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